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    ÉricÉric
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      Some connecting ideas for this thread so far — doesn’t make yet complete sense, but we’ll see… :

      As it turns out, Aaron and Tibu are the same person. After Aaron attached his watch to the Wall of Watches, he suddenly found himself transported to a different time and place. Disoriented and confused, he stumbled upon a time-traveling device and accidentally activated it, sending him hurtling through time and space.

      As Tibu, Aaron found himself in a strange new world, unable to remember anything about his past life as Aaron. He struggled to adapt to his new surroundings, living on the streets and relying on the kindness of strangers to survive.

      One day, while wandering the streets of a small Spanish town, Tibu stumbled upon a lost little girl named Lily. Recognizing the fear and confusion in her eyes, Tibu felt an instant connection to her. He promised to help her find her way home and they set off together, embarking on a journey to discover Lily’s true identity.

      As they traveled together, Lily began to open up to Tibu, sharing her dreams and fears with him. Tibu, in turn, began to share his own story with her, remembering parts about his life as Aaron and finally the accident that had left him in a coma.

      It was only through his travels with Lily that Tibu began to piece together the fragments of his past and come to terms with his true identity. And it was through his connection with Lily that he found the strength and courage to confront the truth about his past and move forward with his life.

      As for how Aaron ended up in a coma, it was revealed that he had been involved in a car accident while on his way to an important meeting. The accident left him in a coma, and it was only through his journey as Tibu that he was finally able to wake up and remember his past life as Aaron.

      #6487
      DevanDevan
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        I’ve always felt like the odd one out in my family. Growing up at the Flying Fish Inn, I’ve always felt like I was on the outside looking in. My mother left when I was young, and my father disappeared not long after. I’ve always felt like I was the only one who didn’t fit in with the craziness of my family.

        I’ve always tried to keep my distance with the others. I didn’t want to get too involved, take sides about petty things, like growing weed in the backyard, making psychedelic termite honey, or trying to influence the twins to buy proper clothes. But truth is, you can’t get too far away. Town’s too small. Family always get back to you, and manage to get you involved in their shit, one way or another, even if you don’t say anything. That’s how it works. They don’t need my participation to use me as an argument.

        So I stopped paying attention, almost stopped caring. I lived my life working at the gas station, and drinking beers with my buddies Joe and Jasper, living in a semi-comatose state. I learned that word today when I came bringing little honey buns to mater. I know she secretly likes them, even if she pretend she doesn’t in front of Idle. But I can see the breadcrumbs on her cardigan when I come say hi at the end of the day. This morning, Idle was rocking in her favourite chair on the porch, looking at the clouds behind her mirrored sunglasses. Prune was talking to her, I saw she was angry because of the contraction of the muscles of her jaw and her eyes were darker than usual. She was saying to Idle that she was always in a semi-comatose state and doing nothing useful for the Inn when we had a bunch of tourists arriving. And something about the twins redecorating the rooms without proper design knowledge. Idle did what she usually does. She ignored the comment and kept on looking at the clouds. I’m not even sure she heard or understood that word that Prune said. Semi-comatose. It sounds like glucose. That’s how I’m spending my life between the Inn, the gas station and my buddies.

        But things changed today when I got back to my apartment for lunch. You can call it a hunch or a coincidence. But as we talked with Joe about that time when my dad left, making me think we were doing hide and seek, and he left me a note saying he would be back someday. I don’t know why I felt the need to go search that note afterwards. So I went back to the apartment and opened the mailbox. Among the bills and ads, I found a postcard with a few words written on the image and nothing except my address on the back. I knew it was from my dad.

        It was not signed or anything, but still I was sure it was his handwriting. I would recognise it anywhere. I went and took the shoebox I keep hidden on top of the kitchen closet, because I saw people do that in movies. That’s not very original, I know, but I’m not too bright either. I opened the box and took the note my dad left me when he disappeared.

        I put the card on the desk near the note. The handwritings matched. I felt so excited, and confused.

        A few words at the bottom of the card said : “Memories from the coldest place on Earth…”

        Why would dad go to such a place to send me a postcard after all those years ? Just to say that.

        That’s when I recalled what Prune had told me once as we were watching a detective movie : “Read everything with care and always double check your information.”

        On the back, it said that the image was from a scientific station in Antartica, but the stamp indicated it had been posted from a floating post office in the North Pole. I turned the card and looked at the text again. Above the station, a few words were written that sounded like a riddle.

        > A mine, a tile, dust piled high,
        Together they rest, yet always outside.
        One misstep, and you’ll surely fall,
        Into the depths, where danger lies all.

        It sure sounds like a warning. But I’m not too good with riddles. No need to worry Mater about that, in case of false hope and all that. Idle ? Don’t even think about it. She won’t believe me when I say it’s from dad. She never does believe me. And she’ll keep playing with the words trying to find her answer in the shape of smoke. The twins, they are a riddle on their own.

        No. It’s Prune’s help I need.

        #6137

        In reply to: Tart Wreck Repackage

        “Shut up, Tara!” hissed Star, “And keep him singing while I think. This is a monumental clue!”

        “But I can’t stand bloody opera singing,” Tara whispered back, “It’ll drive me mad.  When they said he had a melodious voice I was expecting something more modern than this ancient caterwauling.”

        “Do you want to solve this case or not?”

        “Oh alright then,” Tara said grudgingly. “But your thinking better be good!”  She clapped loudly and whistled. “More! More!” she shouted, stamping her feet. The assorted middle aged ladies joined in the applause.

        Star leaned over and whispered in Tara’s ear, “Do you remember that client I had at Madame Limonella’s, that nice old man with a penchant for seeing me dressed up as a 13th century Italian peasant?”

        “Yeah, you had to listen to opera with him, poor thing, but he did tip well.”

        “Well, he told me a lot about opera. I thought it was a waste of time knowing all that useless old stuff, but listen: this song what he’s singing now, he’s singing this on purpose. It’s a clue, you see, to Uncle Basil and why Vince wants to find him.”

        “Go on,” whispered Tara.

        “There’s a lot of money involved, and a will that needs to be changed. If Uncle Basil dies while he’s still in the clutches of that cult, then Vince will lose his chance of inheriting Basil’s money.”

        “Wasn’t that obvious from the start?”

        “Well yes, but we got very cleverly sidetracked with all these middle aged ladies and that wardrobe!  This is where the mule comes in.”

        “What mule?”

        “Shh! Keep your voice down! It’s not the same kind of mule as in the opera, these middle aged ladies are trafficking mules!”

        “Oh well that would make sense, they’d be perfect. Nobody suspects middle aged ladies.  But what are they trafficking, and why are they all here?”

        “They’re here to keep us from finding out the truth with all these silly sidetracks and distractions.  And we’ve stupidly let ourselves be led astray from the real case.”

        “What’s the real case, then?”

        “We need to find Uncle Basil so that Vince can change his will. It wasn’t Vince that was in a coma, as that hatchet faced old butler told us. It was Basil.”

        “How do you know that for sure?” asked Tara.

        “I don’t know for sure, but this is the theory. Once we have a theory, we can prove it.  Now, about that wardrobe. We mustn’t let them take it away. No matter what story they come up with, that wardrobe stays where it is, in our office.”

        “But why? It’s taking up space and it doesn’t go with the clean modern style.  And people keep getting locked inside it, it’s a death trap.”

        “That’s what they want you to think! That it’s just another ghastly old wardrobe!  But it’s how they smuggle the stuff!”

        “What stuff are they smuggling? Drugs?  That doesn’t explain what it’s doing in our office, though.”

        “Well, I had an interesting intuition about that. You know that modified carrot story they tried to palm us off with? Well I reckon it’s vaccines.  They had to come up with a way to vaccinate the anti vaxxers, so they made this batch of vaccines hidden in hallucinogenic carrots.  They’re touting the carrots as a new age spiritual vibration enhancing wake up drug, and the anti vaxxers will flock to it in droves.”

        “Surely if they’re so worried about the ingredients in vaccines, they won’t just take any old illegal drug off the street?”

        Star laughed loudly, quickly putting her hand over her mouth to silence the guffaw.  Thankfully Vince had reached a powerful crescendo and nobody heard her.

        Tara smiled ruefully. “Yeah, I guess that was a silly thing to say.  But now I’m confused.  Whose side are we on? Surely the carrot vaccine is a good idea?  Are we trying to stop them or what?  And what is Vince up to? Falsifying a will?” Tara frowned, puzzled. “Whose side are we on?” she repeated.

        “We’re on the side of the client who pays us, Tara,” Star reminded her.

        “But what if the client is morally bankrupt? What if it goes against our guidelines?”

        “Guidelines don’t come into it when you’re financially bankrupt!” Star snapped.  “Hey, where has everyone gone?”

        “They said they had to pick up a wardrobe,” said the waitress. “Shall I bring you the bill?  They all left without paying, they said you were treating them.”

        “Pay the bill, Tara!” screamed Star, knocking over her chair as she flew out of the door. “And then make haste to the office and help me stop them!”

        #6122

        In reply to: Tart Wreck Repackage

        “Wait!” said Star. “Have we unwittingly stumbled upon a secret meeting of the bellbird cult?”

        The bouncer laughed. “Not exactly a secret meeting. It’s more of our monthly get-together. We have drinks and what-not and a bit of a sing-song”

        “Sound great! Where do I sign up?” asked Tara, mesmerised by the burly bouncer’s biceps.

        Tara!” hissed Star. “I think you’ve had a few too many!” Just then, she noticed April trying to make a sneaky getaway.”NOT SO FAST, APRIL!” she shouted.”Grab her, Burly Bouncer!”

        The BB grinned charmingly and grabbed hold of April. “Anything to oblige,” he said, flirtatiously winking at Star.

        “Now, April,” said Star sternly, “you are not going anywhere until you have told us exactly what is going on?”

        April sighed crossly. “I came to the get-together tonight to find out if anyone had seen or heard from Vince. It was mere chance I stumbled upon you two.”

        Tara sneered at the obvious lie. “Then why did you run? Huh?”

        “If you must know, and it appears you must, I believe I saw him.” She pointed to the entrance. “He was wearing a disguise of course. When he saw me, he ran, clearly fearing I would see through his disguise and reveal to the world that he is not in a coma.”

        Star scratched her head. “I see,” she said.

        “So much for New Zealand and your remote viewing skills,” sneered Tara.

        “Why is Vince French pretending to be in a coma? And, if it is not him, then who is in a coma?” asked Star, ignoring Tara’s rudeness. She had always been a nasty drunk.

        April shook her head. “Those are questions only Vincent French can answer.”

        “Going around in circles a bit, aren’t you?” said BB with a kindly smile. “Cheer up! Look around you! Beauty is everywhere and drinks are on the house!”

        #6116

        In reply to: Tart Wreck Repackage

        “What a load of rubbish,” said Star later. “I don’t believe a word of it. Well, except for the part about Vince French not being in a coma, that bit rang true. But the rest of it’s downright nonsense, if you ask me.”

        Tara waved to the waiter and ordered another two gin and tonics.  The Bell Bird Inn was conveniently located mid way between the office and their apartment, and needless to say, they were regulars.

        “There’s definitely something fishy going on with April’s story,” Tara agreed. “The wardrobe, for instance. Those notes with the same handwriting.  I don’t believe she’s filthy rich, either. Nobody who is filthy rich ever says “I’m filthy rich”.”

        “How would you know? How many filthy rich people do you hobnob with, then?”

        “Let’s not get off the point!” Star cried, exasperated. “What are we going to do?”

        “May as well start at the bottom and work our way up. Vince’s bottom. All we need to do is find Vince’s tattoo and we’ll have found Vince.  It’s fiendishly simple!” Tara looked smug.

        “Oh, right,” said Star when she found her voice. “Right. Because it’s just so easy to peruse bottom tattoos on the general public.”

        Tara giggled. “Don’t be silly. This is where we use our special unofficial skills. Remote viewing.”

        “But where do we start?”

        “Set the intention, and trust your intuition. Oh come on,” Star’s lack of enthusiasm was becoming tedious. “It will be fun!”

        #6114

        In reply to: Tart Wreck Repackage

        Aunt April blew her nose loudly into a tissue.

        “Are you ready to talk, April?” asked Star gently.

        April nodded, took a sip from her tea, put it on the saucer and sighed loudly. “I’ll do my best. You see, everyone thinks Vince French is in a coma. But he isn’t. That isn’t Vince.”

        “Wait up, let me take notes,” said Tara. “So, how do you know that isn’t Vince French?”

        “The real Vince has a tattoo of a bell-bird on his right buttock.”

        Rosamund snorted. “Ooh, go Auntie April!”

        “I had my suspicions … so I had to see for myself. On pretext of being a nurse, I managed to inveigle myself into the institution where he is supposedly being kept to look at his derriere. There are other small differences too, but that clinched it for me.”

        Star nodded. “I see, well done! So you and Vincent French were having an …?”

        “A liaison of rather a passionate nature. Yes.”

        “And the wardrobe? The notes?”

        “I had the wardrobe sent up.”

        Tara looked puzzled. “But … what on earth for?”

        “Oh, the wardrobe is a red herring. I really just wanted to get rid of it and rather than send it to charity thought you girls might make use of it.”

        “And the notes? The fictitious Uncle Albie?” asked Star.

        April screwed up her face and giggled nervously. “Well, you are a struggling start-up business and there were no social media reviews to go by … so it was a test really. To see if you were good enough to take on the case.”

        Tara glowered at her. “And?”

        “You passed! Congratulations! As Rosamund may have told you, I am filthy rich and money is no object. We must get to the bottom of this mystery.”

        “Bottom,” said Rosamund and sniggered.

        #6071

        In reply to: Tart Wreck Repackage

        “Listen” said Gabe, the cult leader. “How long have you been Gourd level? One year?”

        The other nodded.

        “See Gavin, I think you’re ready to go Operating Tomathetan.”

        Gavin gulped. “But, but… are you sure about such a leap? And… what about…”

        “Oh, don’t worry about him, the yielding of his crops has been written, and it’s not good. Better look toward the future Gavin. And let me ask you something, don’t you think about the future?”

        When the Great Leader Undisputed Gabe had spoken, it was customary to bow and continue listen, in case he wasn’t finished.

        “Is there anything more I can do you for, oh GLUG?”

        “Sure. Get me your proposal for the new organization of the crops. No rush. Tomorrow will be fine.”

        “Your great leaderness is too bountiful.”

        “Of course. Now scram, I have rituals to attend to.” And with that, Great Leader Undisputed Gabe made a hasty retreat into the inner sanctum with his favourite vestal priestess of the moment.

        :fleuron:

        Gavin was flummoxed. It had all been foretold by the heretic Basil. He wondered, should he consult him? The weight of this sudden assignment felt heavy on his shoulders. He wondered how he could solve the mountain of problems that had accumulated like horse shit on a pile of manure.

        :fleuron:

        “You’ll see, it’s all connected.” Star signaled Tara when they were ushered into the inner sanctum. “I’m sure all the trail of clues have led to this for a reason. Have I told you about my theories about multiple timelines and probable selves? Maybe the Vince who called us called us from a different probability…”

        “You probably right, but that nurse outfit is really too tight.” Tara wiggled impatiently on her chair.

        “AH! There you are!” a manly voice behind them. “Welcome, welcome, young fresh divine sprouts.”

        “Did he call us prouts?” Tara almost tittered. “Sshtt” Star elbowed her.

        Gabe took a while to observe them, then made a face. “Not the freshest batch I had, I must admit, but that should do.”

        He clapped his hands, and a woman entered. “Get those two well anointed, and prepared in the art of leafing.”

        Tara and Star looked at each other with an air of utter incomprehension on their faces, but decided unanimously to just go with the flow. Who knows, if all was indeed connected, it would probably bring them one step closer to Uncle Basil and the solving of mysterious comatose Vince.

        #5830

        In reply to: Tart Wreck Repackage

        “Well, that was certainly enlightening.” Star said, once they got out of the bushes where they’d fell.

        Tara looked at the bushes and mused “Must be what they mean when they say it all went pear-shaped from now on…”

        “Nonsense, Tara. At least we now know there’s a good chance the real Vince was planning to spread some pathogen into the cult, got caught and sent into a coma for it.”

        “Shouldn’t we leave Rosamund with those silly conspiracy theories? After all, we were hired to find Basil, not to save the world.”

        “Thank the Mother for that, we’re not equipped, and it can’t afford our saving.”

        “Speak for yourself!” hissed Tara. “So, Basil? Any idea where he might be now?”

        “My guess he’s held prisoner at the cult. We should give it a second look.”

        “Might be tougher now it’s in lockdown.”

        Star grinned widely. “I always knew I’d find good use for those nice fancy party nurse dresses.”

        #5817

        In reply to: Tart Wreck Repackage

        “Wait!” hissed Tara. She grabbed Star’s arm and pulled her behind one of the ornamental pear trees which graced either side of the front path.

        “Ouch! that hurt!”

        “Look!” Tara nodded towards the mansion. “Over there, far window. It’s open.”

        Star, still smarting from being unceremoniously dragged into the bushes, shrugged her shoulders. “So?”

        “We’ve come all this way. We can’t go without a fight! Let’s break in!” Tara’s face was animated. “I mean, who is going to stop us? That butler could barely walk and Mr French is supposedly in a coma … and … well, don’t you think it seems strange about the accident and everything?”

        “A bit odd. I suppose we could give it a go,” said Star grudgingly, (though privately impressed by Tara’s bold suggestion), “At least pop our heads in the window … see what’s what.”

        Keeping low under cover of the ornamental pears, they crept back towards the house. “Did that curtain move?” whispered Star. “It fluttered, the room next to the open window!”

        #5807

        In reply to: Tart Wreck Repackage

        The front door of Mr French had a certain Gothic quality to it which caught the eye of Star. She was a sucker for the glitz and the extravagant –the more garish, the better. Had she got her way, their office would be full of the cumbersome stuff. Catching the glint in Star’s green eyes, Tara rolled hers. She clanged the metal lion to signal their presence.

        A decrepit butler called off their ruckus after what seemed like a pause in eternity. They could hear the rambling from a distance behind the door. “I’m coming! No need for such noise! Ah, these youngs nowadays, not a shred of patience!…”

        “Are you sure about it Star? After all, the deposit check cleared, why should we be concerned about Mr French. And we still haven’t got much to go on about Uncle Basil…”

        “Shttt, let me handle it,” replied Star shaping her face into a genial one, oozing honey and butterflies.

        When the butler finally opened the door, he snapped her shut “We’re not interested in whatever… hem, services you’re offering Mesdames.”

        Tara caught Star’s hand mid-air, as it was about to fly and land square on the rude dried up mummy’s face in front of them.

        “Sir, you must have us confused. We’ve been hired a week ago by Mr French for a very private matter we cannot obviously discuss on the doorstep. Please check with Mr French, maybe?”

        The butler’s face turned sour. “Yes of course, I understand. Then you should know Mr French has been in a coma since his dreadful accident last month. Since you have a direct line to him, I suggest you… call him?” And with that, he slammed the door shut on their faces.

        “Rude!” Tara mouthed.

        “At least, that tells us something my dear.”

        “Don’t bait me like this. I’ll ask, what exactly?”

        “That our Mr French is not who he says he is…”

        “I wonder if it has something to do with the immense fortune he made with his voice…”

        “That would be a very interesting question to answer indeed.”

        #4082
        Avatarrmkreeg
        Participant

          At first, I think the continuity will, by design, seem to be disjointed. The reader will start off confused. But yes, I think there will start to be things that carry over as he begins to remember and assemble a personality that transcends the individual stories. This eventual personality, may or may not match up with his original personality from before the coma…probably not…but he’ll definitely begin to remember who he was. And perhaps there will be a meaningful contrast between his new transcending personality and his old real life personality.

          The idea is that each story puts him/her in a situation and there’s always something about that situation that resonates with him/her. That resonating is a clue to their original real life from before the coma started.

          And so the aspect that resonates becomes a part of the transcending personality and begins to carry over into the next stories.

          There’ll probably be situations where there’s a conflict between the transcending personality and the story personality that he/she naturally wants to flow with.

          Like, the story that they’re in might have them as a female in Greece, and he/she wants to flow with that story, but the transcending personality is there in the back of the mind, resonating as a male, for instance.

          This would be like an allegory for multiple lives, perhaps, but without bringing up reincarnation, and encapsulating it into a story that any reader can believe and resonate with. Almost like tricking the reader into learning something about multiple lives and essence.

          F LoveF Love
          Participant

            NOTES FROM GROUP DISCUSSION:

            [unnamed protagonist] finds themself in a coma, but they don’t realize it. It’s like they’re in a dream state, moving through worlds, gradually discovering their past and what’s happening. The person knows that they’re trying to find their way home, which in reality is them trying to wake up.

            Once they remember their past and what happened leading up to the coma, they wake up…but remember nothing.

            So, as I was trying to structure this, I initially wanted the first book to be their normal waking life and the second book being the coma and the third book being post coma and relearning stuff. But then I figured it would be best to combine the first and second books.

            I wanted the reader to start out confused, just like they would be and gradually learn the back story as they went

            The only thing is, that would mean that this thread has to remain written as coming from their perspective

            we are all writing about ONE character essentially. obviously there are gonna be other characters, but the main thread is this one person

            feel free to incorporate any and all previous characters and locations from your other threads. The protagonist will be moving through them. So he/she finds themselves in these other worlds.

            They’re being swept up into an adventure right from the start without knowing a thing

            let’s drop them into the middle of something exciting

            It’s any time
            It’s a big dream
            In real life, the protagonist is in a coma right now

            But, also, you’ll have a lot of freedom to create those on the spot because neither you nor the reader nor the main character knows them until you write them

            The characters in this story won’t have too much staying power because the main character is moving through so many worlds. Nearly everyone is incidental,

            unless characters appear that are central to the main characters ongoing story, like a nurse for example or family

            At max, there might be two or three reoccurring characters that tend to pop in more often than not as helpers
            Oh, yeah, family from the back story would come in to play a lot

            #120
            TracyTracy
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